UPDATE今天模擬考獨立作文題目就出這題，有沒有這麼巧啊！但我還是無能在限定時間內寫完300字。崩潰。
明天要模擬考了，自己在家練習英文作文，30分鐘該寫至少300字的題目，我花1.5小時只寫了261字。題庫裡竟然還有雞巴毛例：「如果你要發明一件新玩意兒，那會是什麼東西？請列舉確切細節解釋該物迫切需要被發明」，更，我可以寫任意門嗎？嗚嗚嗚，菜鳥我不僅打字龜速，腦筋轉速也相當遲緩，只希望屆時不要交白卷。以下是練習題之一，先自招我很爛，公開非常丟臉但我不怕，歡迎學術交流性質的踢館，放腳過來吧。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Only people who earn a lot of money are successful .
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Given the choice between agreeing or disagreeing with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful, I certainly disagree. It is believed that richness is one of the most important symbols nowadays to define whether a person succeeds or not, but I hold that money is not equal to success in the lifetime as two following reasons.
First, it is a successful relationship that money cannot buy. For example, aboss leader of an international company may be good at business having himself or herself on the Forbes magazine, but he or she may never get along with his or her spouse and children since spending all family time on work. People unable to work on relationships can never be called successful, while their relatives see them as losers.
Second, it is a successful character that has nothing to do with fortune. Take Mother Teresa as a good example. She devoted almost her whole lifein Africain charity work helping poor residentsthe homeless children, the disaster victims, and the hungry all around the world. She appealed to worldwide attentions in Ethiopia. And people starving from birth have had her mercy they did not have on earth. She wore plain clothes and ate simple food. It goes without saying she didn’t do it for fame or fortune as a successful lady, but her kindness evoked all mankind pure and beautiful thoughts.
In short, when it comes to talk about a successful person, there are so many things that count not only the ability of making money, but also the affections and spirits one brings. So I disagree with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful .
明天要模擬考了，自己在家練習英文作文，30分鐘該寫至少300字的題目，我花1.5小時只寫了261字。題庫裡竟然還有雞巴毛例：「如果你要發明一件新玩意兒，那會是什麼東西？請列舉確切細節解釋該物迫切需要被發明」，更，我可以寫任意門嗎？嗚嗚嗚，菜鳥我不僅打字龜速，腦筋轉速也相當遲緩，只希望屆時不要交白卷。以下是練習題之一，先自招我很爛，公開非常丟臉但我不怕，歡迎學術交流性質的踢館，放腳過來吧。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Only people who earn a lot of money are successful .
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Given the choice between agreeing or disagreeing with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful, I certainly disagree. It is believed that richness is one of the most important symbols nowadays to define whether a person succeeds or not, but I hold that money is not equal to success in the lifetime as two following reasons.
First, it is a successful relationship that money cannot buy. For example, a
Second, it is a successful character that has nothing to do with fortune. Take Mother Teresa as a good example. She devoted almost her whole life
In short, when it comes to talk about a successful person, there are so many things that count not only the ability of making money, but also the affections and spirits one brings. So I disagree with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful .
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小的覺得好熟悉的架構呀
這是傳說中跟我寫作同一個老師的教法嗎？
俺實在受不了那尾音加重的腔調呀！
話說俺老女人逼近三十大關在補習班啃英文還是苦差事 雜們共奮之 ~~~~
對了，我很喜歡你這系列的文章，可能是激勵留學的老骨頭之好文好物呀~~~^^
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第二段的開頭有點小怪，不妨改寫成：In addition, the definition of success can take many forms, it could be winning the Olympic gold medal, or to improve the living quality of mankind. Take Mother Theresa as a good example… 如何？想了一下..
其實，直接用 In addition, success can take many forms 好像更為扼要而且先從討論題目下手，至少可以讓你多發揮100字以上吧~
Given the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful, I strongly agree. It is believed that richness is an important element to determine a person’s success. I am affirmative on this statement for the following two reasons.
First, the more you earn the higher position you are in society. For example, Bill Gates, the founder of Microsoft, who has often been referred to as a successful business magnate on the magazines and newspapers. Gates is one of the world’s richest people. No one would ever question that Gates, the wealthiest man in the world isn’t successful. We are living in a materialistic society. Money is an indispensable element of earning living nowadays. University students prefer having professional qualifications not just because they can earn more money if they become lawyers, doctors or engineers and also they get more respect from others if they become a professional. In employment, it is not uncommon to switch jobs for a few extra dollars. Wealthy does equal success in the materialistic world.
Second, people who earn more money are more powerful than others and hence more successful in their fields. Take Angelina Jolie as an example, Jolie achieved international fame as a result of her roles in major films and she is one of the best-known and highest-paid actresses in the world. Jolie became personally aware of worldwide humanitarian crises and has devoted herself in charity work. She donated millions of dollars to various charity organizations. Money has made Jolie become a powerful and influential person. It has made her success not only in her acting career and also in her charity work.
Overall, when it comes to determine a successful person, there are so many elements that count. Undoubtedly, making good money is certainly the main and the most important element among all. Hence I agree with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
每段的第一個字,如果想用First,Second要寫Firstly, Secondly喔
祝福大家寫作愉快^^
1.第二段結尾的while:我印象中while適用在轉折的用法。但此句前後都是在指同樣的態度並沒有轉折。http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/while_1
2.it is .... that分裂句雖然是強調用法，但我覺得阿同樣的句型二三段開頭都使用會比較吃虧!
而且不知道大家是否覺得第三段it is a sucessful character that has ...語意和用法都有些怪。原本要強調的應該是成功的人格勝過於財富，但像巴斯寫的就變成強調成功的人格"和財富一點關係也沒有"。建議可以把has nothing to do with改成outweighs。整句可變化成:what overweighs fortune is one's sucessful character。另外，我個人閱讀上會感覺that後接否定怪怪的，或許類似句可改成:it is "not" .... that....。
另外分享一個寫英文作文的訣竅，就是多用不同的連接詞、轉折語。這樣一來整篇看起來就有如行雲流水般了!
而且,我覺得有點離題了.要討論的是sucess,不是successful relationsip.如果要扯這麼遠,就需要先討論success的定義吧!因為就算朋友覺得他是loser,不代表他不成功阿!又不是要討論money vs happiness.
還有,北美根本就不流行用first,second,thirdly (with or without"ly") 更不流行的是"nowadays" 我高中用的時候就被教訓語義不明.
不過乍看之下還很不錯.只有少數文法錯誤.考試加油啦~(哈哈...真的啦!比一些白痴老外寫得還好一點.)
喔~ 我在國外(我身邊的台灣人)作了次survey.六年級的就連小四出國的都知道"反哺",七年級的...大概是五成.到底是什麼社會現像.
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